Vaietu's Personal Writing - First Draft

I have only been at Bairds Mainfreight for 2 weeks. I think that this is the best school ever that I've been to. During writing I have learnt a lot of new things like describing my feelings using adjectives and lots more that will make my work exciting.

Meleseini's Reflection

In the past few weeks I was writing a personal story. When I finished I had to look at my writing and edit it. It was a little bit hard because we had to have over 20 I, me, my. Well actually I didn't have to improve that bit. Sometimes I got stuck becausse I had to describe my feelings and hook in the reader...but I got though it. I got a little bit of help from my friend. I learned something new and that was my similes, metaphors and onamatopoeia.