STARING Room 9...

A few words about us...

We are a Year 5 and 6 class at Bairds Mainfreight Primary School. We love all kinds of sports, especially rugby, softball and cricket. We love to learn and have fun at the same time! In our class we have Maori, Cook Island, Samoan and Tongan children.

Thursday, September 2, 2010

Meleseini's Reflection

In the past few weeks I was writing a personal story. When I finished I had to look at my writing and edit it. It was a little bit hard because we had to have over 20 I, me, my. Well actually I didn't have to improve that bit. Sometimes I got stuck becausse I had to describe my feelings and hook in the reader...but I got though it. I got a little bit of help from my friend. I learned something new and that was my similes, metaphors and onamatopoeia.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Meleseini,
    I enjoyed reading your story - even if it was a little scary. You did a great job of hooking me in, after the first line I couldn't wait to read more. I think you described the feeling of being scared very well - especially when you said it felt like you were being stalked. It reminded me why I don't watch scary movies! I look forward to reading more of your stories.
    Miss Mac